What do you think of these lyrics I've written?

[aja675]

I daydreamed
About your hazel eyes
And your brown hair
Thinking love was unfair

But when I finally
Told you the truth
I suddenly got to
Be with you

Thank goodness
That I was honest
Following the best policy
Helped you and me

Thank goodness
That love had the best
Intentions for me
Thank God I got lucky

I expected to be
Brian-level unlucky
But this time around
I get to be a Charlie

The stars were
Aligned just right
When I finally
Got to make you mine

Thank goodness
That I was honest
Following the best policy
Helped you and me

Thank goodness
That love had the best
Intentions for me
Thank God I got lucky

Thank goodness
That I was honest
Following the best policy
Helped you and me

Thank goodness
That love had the best
Intentions for me
Thank God I got lucky

[aja675]

Anyone?

[Germanicus]

I read them out to Brodicus, he closed his eyes on the second verse. :(

[aja675]

I read them out to Brodicus, he closed his eyes on the second verse. :(

Why?